1. Posted: March 2, 2017In:

    In 1990 a hapless hair metal band must make their way to Los Angeles for their chance at rock n roll stardom but a weaselly label exec and hot new music fads stand in their way.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    I would just mention 90s or early 90s, unless the specific year matters. If your story has a leader or protagonist, I would have the logline center on his/her leadership qualities dependent on the success of the band's mission. Also, reconsider the hot new music part as well. How can that be an antaRead more

    I would just mention 90s or early 90s, unless the specific year matters. If your story has a leader or protagonist, I would have the logline center on his/her leadership qualities dependent on the success of the band’s mission. Also, reconsider the hot new music part as well. How can that be an antagonistic element?

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  2. Posted: March 5, 2017In:

    A middle aged couple take their niece on a haunted ghost tour in hopes of reconnecting, only to sense the tour guide may not be a guide at all but a ghost.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Erica, my first question raised is why is "middle aged" important enough to mention? I like the reconnecting part with the niece. Recommend emphasizing that, while adding a valid stakes.

    Erica, my first question raised is why is “middle aged” important enough to mention? I like the reconnecting part with the niece. Recommend emphasizing that, while adding a valid stakes.

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