1. Posted: October 10, 2016In:

    A detective’s ex-wife asks him to find their missing son, he discovers that a mysterious old woman abducted him, and learns dark secrets about his wife and his own past, that forces him to take action.

    Gabriel Yakub Logliner

    Such awesome feedback, thank you!!?Will go away and revise again. ?I think I'm realising that I haven't figured out the plot entirely... amazing how writing a ?log line can reveal such important info!

    Such awesome feedback, thank you!!?Will go away and revise again. ?I think I’m realising that I haven’t figured out the plot entirely… amazing how writing a ?log line can reveal such important info!

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  2. Posted: October 10, 2016In:

    A detective’s ex-wife asks him to find their missing son, he discovers that a mysterious old woman abducted him, and learns dark secrets about his wife and his own past, that forces him to take action.

    Gabriel Yakub Logliner

    Looked at the training section, and it really helped my develop my story, and distill it. Thanks for pointing me in the right direction. Here's the revised log line: When a detective investigates the disappearance of his son, he discovers a disturbing mystical secret about their lineage.

    Looked at the training section, and it really helped my develop my story, and distill it. Thanks for pointing me in the right direction. Here’s the revised log line:

    When a detective investigates the disappearance of his son, he discovers a disturbing mystical secret about their lineage.

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  3. Posted: October 10, 2016In:

    A detective’s ex-wife asks him to find their missing son, he discovers that a mysterious old woman abducted him, and learns dark secrets about his wife and his own past, that forces him to take action.

    Gabriel Yakub Logliner

    Thanks so much for the feedback, will have a read of the guidelines and review.

    Thanks so much for the feedback, will have a read of the guidelines and review.

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