1. Posted: January 7, 2019In:

    When society devolves into chaos after the electric grid collapses, an immoral celebrity survivalist leads a group of defrauded fans to defend his remote compound from a ruthless gang of killers who are out to kill him and his family.

    gsfields2004 Penpusher

    Thanks. ?I had played around with the road option, but it felt too much like the Walking Dead...only without the zombies. Just finished the first draft and it?s very close to what you?ve described. ?Protagonist hunkers down at his private compound with his family, but he has a problem. ?He is a realRead more

    Thanks. ?I had played around with the road option, but it felt too much like the Walking Dead…only without the zombies.

    Just finished the first draft and it?s very close to what you?ve described. ?Protagonist hunkers down at his private compound with his family, but he has a problem. ?He is a reality tv show star with almost no understanding of survival stuff. ? ?He?s been selling non-existent ?apocalypse cabins? on his compound to his adoring fans which is why they are there…they?ve come to collect. ?To make matters worse, for years he?s been feeding the ATF names of his fans who have illegal weapons (some of which he sold them) and now one of those people is now out for revenge.

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  2. Posted: January 9, 2019In:

    An ambitious app developer must work at his late father?s winery before he can inherit it and cash out for the money he needs to stop a megalomaniac venture capitalist from stealing his latest app.

    gsfields2004 Penpusher

    Oops, I copied and pasted too much in the logline.? Admin...I would appreciate it if you could strip away the part starting with Protagonist to the end.? Thanks. Logline:? A money hungry app developer must work at his late father?s winery before he can cash out and stop a megalomaniac venture capitaRead more

    Oops, I copied and pasted too much in the logline.? Admin…I would appreciate it if you could strip away the part starting with Protagonist to the end.? Thanks.

    Logline:? A money hungry app developer must work at his late father?s winery before he can cash out and stop a megalomaniac venture capitalist from stealing his latest app.

    Protagonist:? A money hungry software developer

    Antagonist:? A megalomaniac venture capitalist

    Inciting Incident:? Father?s death

    Goal:? Sell winery to bankroll and safeguard his app

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  3. Posted: January 7, 2019In:

    When society devolves into chaos after the electric grid collapses, an immoral celebrity survivalist leads a group of defrauded fans to defend his remote compound from a ruthless gang of killers who are out to kill him and his family.

    gsfields2004 Penpusher

    Thanks again for the many helpful suggestions.? This is the logline I came up with that is more concise while still hitting many of the points made. "An immoral star of a survival TV show must lead a group of fans to the safety of his private compound after the sudden collapse of society . " I consiRead more

    Thanks again for the many helpful suggestions.? This is the logline I came up with that is more concise while still hitting many of the points made.

    “An immoral star of a survival TV show must lead a group of fans to the safety of his private compound after the sudden collapse of society . ”

    I considered Dkpough1’s recommendation regarding the goal, but I don’t want to confuse the goal of the group (survival) which is primal with the arc that the protagonist will go through.? ?Am I correct on this point?? Does a character’s arc belong in the logline?? I’ve read a number of? logline’s for successful movies and I haven’t seen many that reference the arc.

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