1. Posted: February 14, 2024In:

    The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but every power mad government and greedy corporation will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.

    Hallucigenia Penpusher

    Here's a rewrite: The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but must fend off, fight, and negotiate with every power mad government and greedy corporation who will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.

    Here’s a rewrite:

    The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but must fend off, fight, and negotiate with every power mad government and greedy corporation who will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.

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  2. Posted: December 19, 2023In:

    An ex-cop with PTSD, hired to avenge the murder of a child, is partnered with an artificial intelligence, but soon discovers the intelligence could be lying and must find the truth before another child dies.

    Hallucigenia Penpusher

    I like your arrangement a lot. Let's see... Hired to avenge the murder of a child, an ex-cop with PTSD is partnered with an unreliable AI to find the killers before another child dies.

    I like your arrangement a lot. Let’s see…

    Hired to avenge the murder of a child, an ex-cop with PTSD is partnered with an unreliable AI to find the killers before another child dies.

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  3. Posted: December 19, 2023In:

    An ex-cop with PTSD, hired to avenge the murder of a child, is partnered with an artificial intelligence, but soon discovers the intelligence could be lying and must find the truth before another child dies.

    Hallucigenia Penpusher

    Form? Do you mean how is it presented? It's a voice inside of a car that it controls and is chauffeuring the MC through the job.

    Form? Do you mean how is it presented? It’s a voice inside of a car that it controls and is chauffeuring the MC through the job.

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