1. Posted: August 7, 2020In:

    After a family friend of her dies unexpectedly of cancer, a nanny’s life goes on a downward spiral struggles with alcoholism while raising a young girl whom she adopted.

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    Did not understand the purpose of the nanny. Is the young girl daughter of family friend for whom the nanny wants to protect and bring up as a good citizen? Also did not understand the conflict .. does the adopted girl not like the nanny or are there any other external challenges? Mostly did not undRead more

    Did not understand the purpose of the nanny. Is the young girl daughter of family friend for whom the nanny wants to protect and bring up as a good citizen?
    Also did not understand the conflict .. does the adopted girl not like the nanny or are there any other external challenges?
    Mostly did not understand the connection between death of a family friend and the adopted young girl if there is any.

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  2. Posted: August 7, 2020In:

    After being disgracefully fired for cheating from his billion-dollar startup, penniless maverick joins his ex-girlfriend’s bankrupt company to regain his lost glory

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    1. What does the maverick expect from joining a bankrupt company? Does he intend to turn it around? Yes 2. What may prevent him from regaining his lost glory? The other bankrupt company he is joining is anti-thesis to his own ways of doing media savvy, arrogant, devil may care. celebrity business (tRead more

    1. What does the maverick expect from joining a bankrupt company? Does he intend to turn it around?
    Yes
    2. What may prevent him from regaining his lost glory?
    The other bankrupt company he is joining is anti-thesis to his own ways of doing media savvy, arrogant, devil may care. celebrity business (think Elon Musk). They are trying to change humanity slowly by doing something good like open-sourcing data (think Wikipedia / Wikileaks) large corporate and government agencies are trying hard to stop them bringing them on the brink of bankruptcy .. the ex and our guy have completely opposite ideas of Business ethics
    3. Why is he penniless? He had a billion-dollar startup before he got fired. It’s logical that he’d still have a good amount of money when he was fired unless he was incarcerated and forced to pay a hefty fine for his crime.
    Yes. basically, since he was found guilty of cheating/stealing, he was stripped of all his shareholding according to the agreement leaving him almost penniless.
    I avoided adding the antagonist forces(government / large corporates) to keep logline small .. and conflict is primarily internal it’s a bit of golden fleece-like rocky .. about the guy finding his own center without his superpowers of schmuck behavior ..
    Any help to bring that in logline would be truly appreciated .. I will keep working on it anyway.
    It’s basically Elon Musk trying to do Wikileaks. I agree it can be a comedy as well.
    Any suggestions on how to improve the logline would be truly appreciated.

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  3. Posted: August 7, 2020In:

    After being disgracefully fired for cheating from his billion-dollar startup, penniless maverick joins his ex-girlfriend’s bankrupt company to regain his lost glory

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    Thanks

    Thanks

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