1. Posted: August 14, 2019In:

    England 1962. Two teenage sisters, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that launches their career as pop singers. Will they rocket to stardom or fizzle out like a defective cherry bomb?

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    Thanks fwiw. It is actually both. It's about trying to make it as a pop-singing duo, and running into personal problems that may derail their goal. I'll give you "the Coppola" technique a try.

    Thanks fwiw. It is actually both. It’s about trying to make it as a pop-singing duo, and running into personal problems that may derail their goal. I’ll give you “the Coppola” technique a try.

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  2. Posted: August 14, 2019In:

    England 1962. Two teenage sisters, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that launches their career as pop singers. Will they rocket to stardom or fizzle out like a defective cherry bomb?

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    Thanks for your input. Here's another version, but it's much longer: England 1962. When two teenage sisters, sibling rivals, make a demo disc, it launches their singing career. The na?ve, younger sister is a problem drinker and loses her virginity. She finds out she?s pregnant and that her boyfriendRead more

    Thanks for your input. Here’s another version, but it’s much longer:

    England 1962. When two teenage sisters, sibling rivals, make a demo disc, it launches their singing career. The na?ve, younger sister is a problem drinker and loses her virginity. She finds out she?s pregnant and that her boyfriend is married. He persuades her to have an illegal abortion that ends up impacting her whole family.

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  3. Posted: August 12, 2019In:

    After a tragic death puts her family in financial jeopardy, a disgraced athlete partners with an old childhood friend to execute an insurance scheme that puts her on the wrong end of a revenge plot.

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    Was the tragic death a family member or an accident that puts the family in financial jeopardy? Does the tragic death have anything to do with the athlete being disgraced? Is it necessary in the logline to mention partnering with a childhood friend? These are just a few questions that may need clariRead more

    Was the tragic death a family member or an accident that puts the family in financial jeopardy? Does the tragic death have anything to do with the athlete being disgraced? Is it necessary in the logline to mention partnering with a childhood friend? These are just a few questions that may need clarifying.

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