1. Posted: March 15, 2020In:

    The scorned stepchild of a serial killer is pushed to the limit when his stepfather turns on the family and neighbors for what he perceives as their roles in the death of his biological son.

    Jamzies Penpusher

    New and still learning...the event/call to action is great and the strongest part of this log line.? The action/response "pushed to the limit" may need to be more clear.? Nice start.? Hope this helps.

    New and still learning…the event/call to action is great and the strongest part of this log line.? The action/response “pushed to the limit” may need to be more clear.? Nice start.? Hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: February 18, 2020In:

    Johnny Bando, a Japanese Elvis impersonator, collides with Randy North, a small town sheriff tasked with modernizing his office and his band of tripper happy deputies.

    Jamzies Penpusher

    Although I like the names and get a sense of their personalities, I'd keep them out of the logline.? When I first read "modernizing his office" I thought of an interior design makeover.

    Although I like the names and get a sense of their personalities, I’d keep them out of the logline.? When I first read “modernizing his office” I thought of an interior design makeover.

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  3. Posted: February 20, 2020In:

    After his wife of 48 years asks for a divorce, an eccentric old codger embraces single life and modern dating in the search for a new girlfriend.

    Jamzies Penpusher

    This would be funny for sure.? ?Why do I want this old codger to find love...what's at stake if he doesn't?

    This would be funny for sure.? ?Why do I want this old codger to find love…what’s at stake if he doesn’t?

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