1. Posted: July 1, 2021In:

    A career driven wife unwittingly convinces her husband to join her in a tiny trailer cross country adventure, with the secret hopes of avoiding her disastrous financial missteps and saving their delicate marriage.

    Jay_Bird Penpusher

    Thank you Karel! This gives me a new perspective and a better base line to work with. I appreciate it!

    Thank you Karel! This gives me a new perspective and a better base line to work with. I appreciate it!

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  2. Posted: June 4, 2021In:

    All prophets organize in Vedic woods when three missing children’s time travel with the legendary Buddha unfolds a tragic battlefield where the devil imprisoned God for ages. Buddha enters the battleground to liberate God, but evil surrenders even before the combat begin.

    Jay_Bird Penpusher

    This is a really interesting concept! But it's hard to follow who the main character is and what their goal is. Is it being told by the perspective of the prophets? The children? Buddha? God? Try deciding who the main protagonist is and write it from their perspective adding in what they are specifiRead more

    This is a really interesting concept! But it’s hard to follow who the main character is and what their goal is. Is it being told by the perspective of the prophets? The children? Buddha? God?

    Try deciding who the main protagonist is and write it from their perspective adding in what they are specifically trying to do.

    Example (if the children are the main characters)
    3 adventurous children are tasked with assisting the legendary Buddha in a time travelling mission to liberate God from the Devil’s imprisonment.

    I hope this is helpful and keep going with it! 🙂

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  3. Posted: June 23, 2021In:

    A researcher discovers a group of young children who have a collective consciousness, but no one believes him, even when he learns of the children’s plan to rid the world of all those outside their group mind.

    Jay_Bird Penpusher

    I agree with Mike. It's potentially a very cool movie but we need to know not just what's at stake (children ridding the world of everyone who's not with them) but WHO the protagonist is and WHAT they are going to do in order to avoid the stakes from happening. I hope this is helpful and keep goingRead more

    I agree with Mike. It’s potentially a very cool movie but we need to know not just what’s at stake (children ridding the world of everyone who’s not with them) but WHO the protagonist is and WHAT they are going to do in order to avoid the stakes from happening.

    I hope this is helpful and keep going with it 🙂

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