1. Posted: June 22, 2022In:

    When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can withstand her curse, and her temper.

    Loe Jones Penpusher

    Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it. Would something like this work: When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can be with her without touch, or else have their heart stop.

    Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it. Would something like this work:

    When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can be with her without touch, or else have their heart stop.

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  2. Posted: June 27, 2022In:

    When her family unexpectedly comes back into her life after years of estrangement, a young woman must confront her past and the people who will never accept her for who she is.

    Loe Jones Penpusher

    It's really clear. I like it. My only suggestion would be to put 'a young woman' before the event, however I still think its a strong logline as it is.

    It’s really clear. I like it. My only suggestion would be to put ‘a young woman’ before the event, however I still think its a strong logline as it is.

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  3. Posted: June 24, 2022In:

    When two friends wake up to a sunless morning, they learn their roommate hasn’t come home from last night. After a failure to contact him or anyone else, they venture outside in an attempt to understand this anomaly.

    Loe Jones Penpusher

    It feels like there is two different plot lines. Are they related? It's a good start, but I feel it would be clearer if you make the relation more defined.

    It feels like there is two different plot lines. Are they related? It’s a good start, but I feel it would be clearer if you make the relation more defined.

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