1. Posted: October 4, 2017In:

    Being held responsible for the death of the tiger she took care of, a scared single mother has one chance to save her job as a zookeeper: to tame an untamable tiger.

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    Thanks guys. Actually she is a single mother with a five year old daughter. She's unable to speak to people but she's great at communicating with animals. That, and the fact that she has no money, would make it a disaster if she loses her job. But how on earth can i write all this, and an inciting iRead more

    Thanks guys.
    Actually she is a single mother with a five year old daughter. She’s unable to speak to people but she’s great at communicating with animals. That, and the fact that she has no money, would make it a disaster if she loses her job. But how on earth can i write all this, and an inciting incident, and… in one sentence???

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  2. Posted: September 27, 2017In:

    When an extremely silent zookeeper loses a tiger in a tragic accident, her only chance of keeping her job is to negotiate with the peculiar caregivers of a traumatised former circus tiger.

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    Thank you for the advice, dpg and foxtrot25. I was actually trying to do just what you are suggesting with the adjective that threatens the achieving of the goal. Silent--> negotiate. Now i see that the story isn't about the negotiating, but about trying to get that circus tiger to trust her. SoRead more

    Thank you for the advice, dpg and foxtrot25. I was actually trying to do just what you are suggesting with the adjective that threatens the achieving of the goal. Silent–> negotiate.
    Now i see that the story isn’t about the negotiating, but about trying to get that circus tiger to trust her.
    So the adjective should prevent her from being a good tiger tamer, while actually she appears to be an extremely gifted animal whisperer. ‘Afraid of animals’ would be a little to far fetched, no?
    I keep returning to ‘afraid of the people she needs to negotiate with’. That does make her objective a lot harder to achieve, doesn’t it?

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  3. Posted: February 16, 2017In:

    In order to get a job as a zookeeper, a former prostitute must convince the owners of an idyllic wildlife shelter to release their genetically valuable tiger to a questionable city zoo.

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    To get her dream job as a zookeeper in a questionable city zoo, a former prostitute must prove her skills in a remote wildlife shelter by gaining the confidence of the rare tiger that the zoo managers badly want to buy. Do you think this one is better? I'm ?trying to het rid of 'must convince'. It sRead more

    To get her dream job as a zookeeper in a questionable city zoo, a former prostitute must prove her skills in a remote wildlife shelter by gaining the confidence of the rare tiger that the zoo managers badly want to buy.

    Do you think this one is better? I’m ?trying to het rid of ‘must convince’.
    It seems strange to put ‘dream job’ and ‘questionable zoo’ in one sentence, but maybe it’s a good thing?

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