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After having broken up with her partner, a woman overhears a young couple that is falling apart and attempts to save their relationship.
Feel like you could really streamline this logline through better structure and just tightening up certain sentences a little bit. When a heartbroken woman overhears a young couple's bitter argument, she must attempt to reconcile their relationship. 17 words as opposed to your 23. Could now look intRead more
Feel like you could really streamline this logline through better structure and just tightening up certain sentences a little bit.
When a heartbroken woman overhears a young couple’s bitter argument, she must attempt to reconcile their relationship.
17 words as opposed to your 23. Could now look into the real reason she wants to do this, is it to restore her faith in love, to tackle her own heartache and gain catharsis?
See lessWhen the disappearance of his wife falls in the hands of androids, a flawed father must seek answers to the reasoning behind his loss while mistakenly neglecting his daughter in the process
Can't find a way to edit my comment but actually, an even better logline would be: When androids kidnap his wife, a flawed father must seek answers all while mistakenly neglecting his daughter. Now down to 17 words, which again offers more space for ways to beef it up with more interesting words
Can’t find a way to edit my comment but actually, an even better logline would be:
When androids kidnap his wife, a flawed father must seek answers all while mistakenly neglecting his daughter.
Now down to 17 words, which again offers more space for ways to beef it up with more interesting words
See lessWhen the disappearance of his wife falls in the hands of androids, a flawed father must seek answers to the reasoning behind his loss while mistakenly neglecting his daughter in the process
Logline is a little longwinded and not quite worded the best. Instead, maybe try: When his wife is kidnapped by androids, a flawed father must seek answers all while neglecting his daughter in the process. You go from 32 words to 21, and now with some extra space, you could inject some adjectives toRead more
Logline is a little longwinded and not quite worded the best. Instead, maybe try:
When his wife is kidnapped by androids, a flawed father must seek answers all while neglecting his daughter in the process.
You go from 32 words to 21, and now with some extra space, you could inject some adjectives to other characters like the androids or the daughter to spice up the logline.
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