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To thwart the pain of diaspora and disillusionment, a local Asian-American college student pounces into the reckless lifestyle of vigilantes, triads, extremists, and violent pop-culture fanatics.
Maybe more specific pain of... loneliness(?) Diaspora is not a pain. And reduce antagonists to 2 or 3 (Max) To thwart the pain of lonliness (goal), an Asian-American college student (protagonist)pounces (action) into the reckless lifestyle of vigilantes, triads, and violent pop-culture fanatics (antRead more
Maybe more specific pain of… loneliness(?) Diaspora is not a pain. And reduce antagonists to 2 or 3 (Max)
To thwart the pain of lonliness (goal), an Asian-American college student (protagonist)pounces (action) into the reckless lifestyle of vigilantes, triads, and violent pop-culture fanatics (antagonists) .
But what’s at stake?
A young man (protagonist) leads (action) his oddball family (antagonists) and their real-estate-development business (goal) following a securities-fraud fiasco that put the father in jail (stake).
See lessBetrayed by his best friend and controller into killing an innocent man, an environmentalist-turned-hitman puts his life in jeopardy when he tries to save the daughter of the man he’s knowingly killed.
I can't quite make any sense of this...what is a controller? Do you mean tricked into? Who is the environmentalist ? Why is he turned hitman?
I can’t quite make any sense of this…what is a controller? Do you mean tricked into? Who is the environmentalist ? Why is he turned hitman?
See lessA pompous Ivy League grad working on a schlock SCI-FI TV series does whatever it takes to become a producer, but ends up being his own worst enemy.
Thank you Phillipe for that insightful and detailed critique! It's a tough go these loglines! The thing I am aiming at, although I can see it is not expressed well in the logline, is that the protagonist is mid 30's and has made it to middle management. He is the Set Decoration HOD. And while Ivy LeRead more
Thank you Phillipe for that insightful and detailed critique!
See lessIt’s a tough go these loglines!
The thing I am aiming at, although I can see it is not expressed well in the logline, is that the protagonist is mid 30’s and has made it to middle management. He is the Set Decoration HOD. And while Ivy League educated, his pompous, overly theatrical antics (mixed with copious amounts of pot ) thwart his ambitions to rise above the line to become the director or producer he feels entitled to be. However I see his character close to Michael Scott – The Office. A somewhat loveable looser. The comedic series idea is called “Below The Line”