1. Posted: July 25, 2021In:

    After being hired to lead a failing breakfast TV show, a talented but undervalued producer is forced to use crazy tactics in order to improve its ratings.

    Nordic12 Penpusher

    I am not sure if I should be anticipating a sit com or a clever drama. I think "crazy" leaves some anticipating humor and others, unconventional but clever.

    I am not sure if I should be anticipating a sit com or a clever drama. I think “crazy” leaves some anticipating humor and others, unconventional but clever.

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  2. Posted: July 25, 2021In:

    When a young boy is taken away from his father, and starts to get raped by his mother, he must find a way to escape.

    Nordic12 Penpusher

    I see an event described but not an entire story. It reads like an opening line or a teaser, not a logline. Also I would drop "starts to get raped" and put in "gets raped" and drop "When" and start with "A " to tighten it up and make the action more immediate.

    I see an event described but not an entire story. It reads like an opening line or a teaser, not a logline. Also I would drop “starts to get raped” and put in “gets raped” and drop “When” and start with “A ” to tighten it up and make the action more immediate.

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