1. Posted: March 12, 2016In:

    When a narcissistic property developer is convicted for murdering a government official, he must untangle the web of deceit, to prove his innocence

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    Thanks Sumi

    Thanks Sumi

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  2. Posted: March 12, 2016In:

    When a narcissistic property developer is convicted for murdering a government official, he must untangle the web of deceit, to prove his innocence

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    Thank you FWIW and FFF for your feedback. ?Much appreciated.I was trying to follow the rule book in trying to keep it 25 words or below. Trying to cram in the possible answers for the Q's raised, does increase the word count. I was wondering if that level of information needs to be in the log line aRead more

    Thank you FWIW and FFF for your feedback. ?Much appreciated.

    I was trying to follow the rule book in trying to keep it 25 words or below. Trying to cram in the possible answers for the Q’s raised, does increase the word count. I was wondering if that level of information needs to be in the log line at this point when we are just putting out the bare bones of a possible idea?

    The modified version at 28 words.

    When the murder trial of a water licensing official ends in a hung jury, the prime suspect and property developer out on anticipatory bail, must prove his innocence

    Does it need to include ?”to avoid life sentence”?

    Thank you once again…:)

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  3. Posted: February 28, 2016In:

    When a magic trick turns fatal on one of their wives, two magician friends turn rivals to create the ultimate stage illusion with dangerous consequences. The Prestige

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    Hi EmmaMck,Thank you for your review and comments. ?I looked at it from the point of view of both the protagonists. In this story, it really depends on the perception ?of who you want to regard as the protagonist because of the intense rivalry between the two main characters.That?said, what do you tRead more

    Hi EmmaMck,

    Thank you for your review and comments. ?I looked at it from the point of view of both the protagonists. In this story, it really depends on the perception ?of who you want to regard as the protagonist because of the intense rivalry between the two main characters.

    That?said, what do you think of this?

    When a stage magician is accused of neglect, he goes solo and must learn his former friend turned rival?s secret to gain?upmanship.

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