1. Posted: February 15, 2016In:

    When her best friend’s fianc? comes to town, a sheltered outback girl is faced with feelings she never thought she would have. When he asks her to write a song with him about the suspicious death of a local shearer, she discovers that the culprit is someone close to home.

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    Yep this is the story I want to read/see: ? When her best friend's fiance? asks her to ?write a ?song with him about the suspicious death of a local shearer, she discoverers that the culprit is someone close to home?

    Yep this is the story I want to read/see: ? When her best friend’s fiance? asks her to ?write a ?song with him about the suspicious death of a local shearer, she discoverers that the culprit is someone close to home?

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  2. Posted: February 27, 2016In:

    When a troubled young man tries to kill himself, confined to the hospital he finds some peace by supporting cancer patients but faces being discharged and losing his newfound peace.

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    Agree with the above review... this logline is a set up not a complete summary to involve the viewer/reader.? Could there be something that happens with a cancer patient that brings a new twist to the story?? Or could it be that a cancer patient is in great pain and longs for a choice to die?? whatRead more

    Agree with the above review… this logline is a set up not a complete summary to involve the viewer/reader.? Could there be something that happens with a cancer patient that brings a new twist to the story?? Or could it be that a cancer patient is in great pain and longs for a choice to die?? what does he do then?

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  3. Posted: February 12, 2016In:

    Running away from domestic violence in 1920s Oklahoma, a teenager encounters homelessness, alcoholism and drug addiction. Sent to prison, then declared insane, an encounter with a book changes his life

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    Thanks for the feedback. Domestic violence was the inciting incident that got the protagonist into action.? Yes perhaps there are just too many incidents and not a clear theme, or too many themes in the draft.

    Thanks for the feedback.

    Domestic violence was the inciting incident that got the protagonist into action.? Yes perhaps there are just too many incidents and not a clear theme, or too many themes in the draft.

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