1. Posted: June 22, 2022In:

    When a car swerves into a telephone pole, a young girl rushes to help the injured driver; but when the driver takes her hostage as police arrive, she must find a way to escape her captor.

    PeterK Penpusher

    You hooked me in the beginning, can't wait to see what happens.

    You hooked me in the beginning, can’t wait to see what happens.

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  2. Posted: June 27, 2022In:

    A young boy who has ADD and social awkwardness, meets a coach for a basketball team who decides to train the boy into focusing his disabilities into sport and make him a champion.

    PeterK Penpusher

    I agree with Ben. Use this formula, When (an event happens) a(n) (main character) must (do the action). But otherwise it looks like a great story and can't wait to see where you go with it. Peter K.

    I agree with Ben. Use this formula, When (an event happens) a(n) (main character) must (do the action).

    But otherwise it looks like a great story and can’t wait to see where you go with it.

    Peter K.

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  3. Posted: June 22, 2022In:

    When told that the fate of the insane is worse than that of a normal prisoner, a murderer who plans to pretend to be insane must attempt to make the court consider him a sane murderer.

    PeterK Penpusher

    Good that you changed the word amount and it seems better now. It looks like a great story and can't wait to see what you do with it. Peter K.

    Good that you changed the word amount and it seems better now.
    It looks like a great story and can’t wait to see what you do with it.

    Peter K.

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