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A married woman, riddled with guilt, starts over in a tiny village, but making it her home gets even tougher when she discovers she’s falling for the vicar.
Saturday March 24-2018 Apart from being as economical as possible with the use of words, I like looking for three things in a logline as follows: 1 - The protagonist - In your case that would be, "A married woman". 2 - Struggle with antagonist - "riddle with guilt". 3 - Death stake - "discover she'sRead more
Saturday March 24-2018
Apart from being as economical as possible with the use of words, I like looking for three things in a logline as follows:
1 – The protagonist – In your case that would be, “A married woman”.
2 – Struggle with antagonist – “riddle with guilt”.
3 – Death stake – “discover she’s falling in love for the vicar”.
Fair enough, but I’d be more economical with the use of words. At present there are 28 words. I’ll try to shorten it this way.
“A married woman riddle with guilt, starts over in a village but her new life gets tougher when she falls for the vicar”.
That’s twenty three words. Just a quick take without knowing what theme your story will follow. Good luck and I’d like to read more. – Pstone
See lessA smooth talking, but psychologically damaged, criminal with face-blindness rips off a dangerous drug-lord with help from his tough-guy brother. When they are betrayed by their psychopathic accomplice, he must overcome his psychological challenges and track the psychopath through the underground world of experimental hallucinogenic psycho-therapy in order to retrieve the drugs and prevent his brother being murdered.
I would try to shorten this logline. I'll give it a shot. See what you feel! "A smooth talking psychologically damaged criminal, with face-blindness and his brother rips off a drug-lord. They are betrayed by their psychopathic accomplice who must overcome his psychological challenges to find an expeRead more
I would try to shorten this logline. I’ll give it a shot. See what you feel!
“A smooth talking psychologically damaged criminal, with face-blindness and his brother rips off a drug-lord. They are betrayed by their psychopathic accomplice who must overcome his psychological challenges to find an experimental hallucinogenic psycho-therapy ?and prevent the murder of his brother.”
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