1. Posted: September 30, 2015In:

    When the normalcy of an overly meticulous statistical analyst is disrupted by the appearance of a small cloud above his head, he must find a way to get rid of it before his crititcal work presentation.

    puffin_jacket Penpusher

    EDIT 01 When an overly meticulous Statistics Consultant is disrupted by a small cloud, he must find a way to remove it before his critical work presentation.

    EDIT 01

    When an overly meticulous Statistics Consultant is disrupted by a small cloud, he must find a way to remove it before his critical work presentation.

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  2. Posted: September 30, 2015In:

    When a man born with a fox tail falls in love, he must overcome his insecurities about how he looks, to win his foxy lady.

    puffin_jacket Penpusher

    Hiya,I think this sounds cute, perhaps the man could be described a little more?

    Hiya,

    I think this sounds cute, perhaps the man could be described a little more?

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  3. Posted: September 30, 2015In:

    when a dog savagely bites the hand of a colleague of a young vet; she must reattach it in order to save his life.

    puffin_jacket Penpusher

    Hiya,I like this logline and the sense of urgency it creates with the stakes that are involved.The when needs a capital letter, and perhaps a little restructuring? 'bites the hand of a young vets colleague'.Can the young vet be described as anything else? Pretty? Shy??

    Hiya,

    I like this logline and the sense of urgency it creates with the stakes that are involved.

    The when needs a capital letter, and perhaps a little restructuring? ‘bites the hand of a young vets colleague’.

    Can the young vet be described as anything else? Pretty? Shy?

    ?

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