1. Posted: June 27, 2022In:

    Year 2000 hopefuls are bystanders as life throws cruel blow that will determine their once thought perfect futures.

    Sophie Vasic Penpusher

    Maybe be more specific as to what the event is, and start the logline with 'When' as well. Sure it will be a good story to read.

    Maybe be more specific as to what the event is, and start the logline with ‘When’ as well. Sure it will be a good story to read.

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  2. Posted: June 27, 2022In:

    When her family unexpectedly comes back into her life after years of estrangement, a young woman must confront her past and the people who will never accept her for who she is.

    Sophie Vasic Penpusher

    Really interested to see the story play out between the confrontation between her and her family. Maybe be specific to which family members have come back? But overall really excited to read the story.

    Really interested to see the story play out between the confrontation between her and her family. Maybe be specific to which family members have come back? But overall really excited to read the story.

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  3. Posted: June 23, 2022In:

    When confronted with violence in his new home, the son of a buddhist monk must defend himself while still staying true to his beliefs

    Sophie Vasic Penpusher

    Maybe add what started the violence or what the violent act was, as a specific event instead of just stating that he is confronted with violence in his new home. Besides that I really like the story! Really interesting on the first read.

    Maybe add what started the violence or what the violent act was, as a specific event instead of just stating that he is confronted with violence in his new home.

    Besides that I really like the story! Really interesting on the first read.

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