1. Posted: April 13, 2016In:

    Cross

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    Reginald McGhee Penpusher

    I'm not quite sure why a judge wants him convicted. I feel that the logline is a little bit loose. Does he have to come up with the money to finish the to-do list or come up with money to find a lawyer. ?I think those questions got me scratching a little bit. If only the logline was a little bit morRead more

    I’m not quite sure why a judge wants him convicted. I feel that the logline is a little bit loose. Does he have to come up with the money to finish the to-do list or come up with money to find a lawyer. ?I think those questions got me scratching a little bit. If only the logline was a little bit more concise, I wouldn’t mind watching or reading this script.

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  2. Posted: March 23, 2016In:

    When disgraced banker gets a job working as a truck driver for his father and discovers the company?s cover-up of multiple road deaths, he must expose his father?s negligence before someone else dies.

    Reginald McGhee Penpusher

    When a disgraced --- is what you're looking for, not when disgraced. I think the logline is executed well. I just think the grammar is a little bit off. I would think the logline would go like this: A disgraced banker discovers the company's cover-ups of multiple deaths and must expose his father'sRead more

    When a disgraced — is what you’re looking for, not when disgraced. I think the logline is executed well. I just think the grammar is a little bit off. I would think the logline would go like this: A disgraced banker discovers the company’s cover-ups of multiple deaths and must expose his father’s negligence before someone else dies.

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