1. Posted: April 18, 2020In:

    When a visiting dignitary is murdered, the na?ve youngest prince of a fairy-tale kingdom becomes the Watson to a Holmes-like detective. But, when the detective is also killed, the prince must solve the mystery on his own before the situation escalates into all-out war.

    Todd Hancock Penpusher

    After revisiting my idea with Trix's advice in mind, I've come up with a new version of the logline. A na?ve fairy-tale princess must solve the murder of her betrothed prince before the situation escalates into all-out war. ?

    After revisiting my idea with Trix’s advice in mind, I’ve come up with a new version of the logline. A na?ve fairy-tale princess must solve the murder of her betrothed prince before the situation escalates into all-out war.

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  2. Posted: April 16, 2020In:

    When a man?s romantic attentions are ignored by a woman for many years he lures her into a secret meeting with a messenger who proposes an idyllic rendezvous.

    Todd Hancock Penpusher

    This sounds like one of those Lifetime movies, but with the evil man as the main character?

    This sounds like one of those Lifetime movies, but with the evil man as the main character?

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  3. Posted: April 18, 2020In:

    A thirty-something manchild, desperate to get his recently-dumped best friend laid, takes him to a party where his friend falls for a woman who only wants sex, whilst he falls in love for the first time? with his friend?s ex-fiance.

    Todd Hancock Penpusher

    While I disagree with mrliteral that it's impossible to follow (I'm pretty sure I understood it), there are 5 pronouns in that sentence. And 4 characters mentioned. A simplification of the logline may be a good idea.

    While I disagree with mrliteral that it’s impossible to follow (I’m pretty sure I understood it), there are 5 pronouns in that sentence. And 4 characters mentioned. A simplification of the logline may be a good idea.

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