1. Posted: November 13, 2019In:

    When a deadly plague devastates the small village she’s passing, a cloistered sister, just out of the Abbey, hunts down clues to the seemingly magical affliction in order to discover who created the plague and save the town.

    The_CNI Samurai

    I think it's mostly good, but as she is "passing" the town my question is what it is she has to gain? Is she assigned her first case by the Abbey to prove herself? Is it her hometown? Her native town?

    I think it’s mostly good, but as she is “passing” the town my question is what it is she has to gain? Is she assigned her first case by the Abbey to prove herself? Is it her hometown? Her native town?

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  2. Posted: May 3, 2019In:

    After living as a hermit for many years, Lyn rediscover the world through the delivery of a mysterious object. He wonders why he is pushing this huge box. When he needs to understand what pushes him.

    The_CNI Samurai

    I agree mostly with Aidan except for the example logline they wrote. As per the formula, you start with the inciting incident. "After discovering a mysterious object..." etc. The other question is why? What is at stake? What pushes your main character to go on this journey and push this huge box?

    I agree mostly with Aidan except for the example logline they wrote.

    As per the formula, you start with the inciting incident. “After discovering a mysterious object…” etc.

    The other question is why? What is at stake? What pushes your main character to go on this journey and push this huge box?

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