1. Posted: September 23, 2013In:

    A troubled high school guy's view of the preacher's daughter is changed drastically when he finds she has little time to live.

    TomKealy Penpusher

    This logline has a clear charachter and event, but I feel it's lacking a concrete action that the charachter would perform over the course of the film (and thus, and clear end for the movie). How would we know his view of her has changed?

    This logline has a clear charachter and event, but I feel it’s lacking a concrete action that the charachter would perform over the course of the film (and thus, and clear end for the movie). How would we know his view of her has changed?

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  2. Posted: September 5, 2020In:

    As a joke a lonely programmer creates an AI girlfriend that works with VR sunglasses, but his life becomes serious as he tries to hide his growing affection for his digital companion from his worried friends and family

    TomKealy Penpusher

    I'm a little confused about what the main event that forces the programmer to change is - is it that the programmer falls in love with the VR woman? I thought the event happened to the charachter, and wasn't created by them. It's also unclear what action the MC will perform - convince his mother thaRead more

    I’m a little confused about what the main event that forces the programmer to change is – is it that the programmer falls in love with the VR woman? I thought the event happened to the charachter, and wasn’t created by them.

    It’s also unclear what action the MC will perform – convince his mother that this relationship is real? Change society to let him marry the VR girlfriend?

    I also think that this is a little simmilar to ‘Her.’

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