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  1. Posted: December 23, 2022In: Crime

    A housewife and her estranged father mixed up in killing a loan shark struggle to escape both the police hunting them and a brothers vengeance to save the innocent members of their family.

    Tony Edward Penpusher
    Added an answer on December 24, 2022 at 3:23 pm

    Not too bad -- the main issue I think is in regards to the logic of the goal.. as in, why are they needing to save the innocent members of their family? Also - 'mixed up' is a bit vague, as is the Brother's need for vengeance..? 'A bored housewife finds herself on the run from the law after killingRead more

    Not too bad — the main issue I think is in regards to the logic of the goal.. as in, why are they needing to save the innocent members of their family? Also – ‘mixed up’ is a bit vague, as is the Brother’s need for vengeance..?

    ‘A bored housewife finds herself on the run from the law after killing a loan shark to protect her estranged father-in-law’

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    Best of luck 🙂

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