1. Posted: March 25, 2018In:

    A former lone wolf blackwater operative is forced back with his team to stop a terrorist organization from getting a mythological artifact that could destroyed the planet.

    wendylou Logliner

    A few thoughts: if he's a lone wolf, why does he have a team? Do you mean an item that predates known history of man, as in was deposited here from a previous life form??? Also as with a previous comment, why would this be a bad thing?

    A few thoughts: if he’s a lone wolf, why does he have a team? Do you mean an item that predates known history of man, as in was deposited here from a previous life form??? Also as with a previous comment, why would this be a bad thing?

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  2. Posted: March 25, 2018In:

    After recruitment, a DSA agent takes on the toughest cases that are thrown at her, while trying to maintain a relationship with her handsome, yet computer-nerd boyfriend.

    wendylou Logliner

    I think for me it's missing the key 'what actually could go wrong/causes the drama' part.

    I think for me it’s missing the key ‘what actually could go wrong/causes the drama’ part.

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  3. Posted: March 24, 2018In:

    A married woman, riddled with guilt, starts over in a tiny village, but making it her home gets even tougher when she discovers she’s falling for the vicar.

    wendylou Logliner

    How about:A married woman, challenged to love again, finds her heart drawn to the local vicar, but falling for him will bring unhappiness to others and plague her conscience with guilt.

    How about:A married woman, challenged to love again, finds her heart drawn to the local vicar, but falling for him will bring unhappiness to others and plague her conscience with guilt.

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