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  1. Posted: April 28, 2017In: Drama

    When a senior Barrister?s reputation is threatened by Alzheimer’s disease, he must enlist his estranged Barrister son, to secretly help him conduct a murder trial.

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    Added an answer on April 28, 2017 at 9:26 pm

    I agree. This is an interesting idea. I like it a lot. As Richiev and dpg suggested, perhaps the son could be the protagonist. It also addresses the points raised by Nir Shelter ?about ?the premise and 'what's the point?' When the audience goes on the journey through the son's POV we ?learn: 1. whyRead more

    I agree. This is an interesting idea. I like it a lot.

    As Richiev and dpg suggested, perhaps the son could be the protagonist. It also addresses the points raised by Nir Shelter ?about ?the premise and ‘what’s the point?’

    When the audience goes on the journey through the son’s POV we ?learn:

    1. why he’s decided to help his father. Perhaps the son wouldn’t be where he is now if it weren’t for his father. Maybe a sense of guilt?
    2. how important it is for the father to maintain his reputation and win this case. ?Knowing his father is unwell and he has little time before his dementia worsens and he becomes completely incapacitated, winning the case is a way to make amends as well as having his father retire from law on a reputation high
    2. understand why father and son are estranged (maybe it was the son’s fault and this is why the son is doing this for his father, it’s an attempt to reconcile.

    Alternatively, during the murder trial, and over the course?of the film, the audience see both POV’s of the father’s and the son in relation to their father/ son relationship and how they became estranged – maybe there are some plot twists and “I didn’t see that coming” moments and the audience question the motives for both father and son – all this set against a backdrop of murder trial which thematically mirrors the story of the main characters.

    In the?TV series Broadchurch, there was a?barrister who was losing her vision (which no one knows about) and her colleague/solicitor reads and records legal documents which she listens to before she faces the court. Your story reminds me a little of this dynamic. While the barrister in Broadchurch was not the main character, it created this race against time feeling as you see the deterioration?of her eyesight?which forces her to confess that her vision is impaired.

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  2. Posted: April 28, 2017In: Drama

    A Estranged Father is kidnapped by his business partner in NYC, He must escape to reconcile with his kids or die regarding in a small old apartment.

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    Added an answer on April 28, 2017 at 8:49 pm

    I just have some questions and food for thought, not necessarily to include?in the logline but about the plot which may inform the reworking of the logline... * I wouldn't have the word 'estranged' as the second word or as a description of the main character. It seems out of place here, (but I underRead more

    I just have some questions and food for thought, not necessarily to include?in the logline but about the plot which may inform the reworking of the logline…

    * I wouldn’t have the word ‘estranged’ as the second word or as a description of the main character. It seems out of place here, (but I understand that you are trying to set up the fact that the man has issues with his kids).
    * Why is the father kidnapped by his business partner? Does the business partner have any connection to the father’s kids and why he is estranged?
    * He needs to escape regardless whether he needs to reconcile with his kids or not, however, is he racing against time? Does he have a small window of opportunity to see his kids and if he doesn’t do it in that time then all will be lost?

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  3. Posted: April 28, 2017In: Drama

    When a shy teenager finds herself torn between her life-long best friend and a potential new love, she discovers one of them is a projection of her mental illness.

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    Added an answer on April 28, 2017 at 8:41 pm

    Hi, Why is the teen torn?between the two? Is her life-long friendship threatened by the potential boyfriend? ?Will she lose one if she chooses the other and why?

    Hi, Why is the teen torn?between the two? Is her life-long friendship threatened by the potential boyfriend? ?Will she lose one if she chooses the other and why?

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