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17 year old twin, Deighton Young needs to negotiate his last year of school while grieving for his recently drowned brother. Dropping out of school due to grief he is forced by his father to work for white collar criminal Harry Mackay, in doing so he uncovers unethical business practice leading back to resolving a multi-generational mystery surrounding the disappearance of Lani Drum 40 years earlier.
It seems a little too wordy. You could change it to something like: 17-year-old, Deighton Young drops out of school and forced to work for white-collar criminal Harry Mackay. He uncovers sketchy things related to the Lani Drum disappearance and the multi-generation mystery surrounding it. That's notRead more
It seems a little too wordy.
You could change it to something like:
17-year-old, Deighton Young drops out of school and forced to work for white-collar criminal Harry Mackay. He uncovers sketchy things related to the Lani Drum disappearance and the multi-generation mystery surrounding it.
That’s not the best, but it gets the point across quicker, more concise, and leaves the audience hooked.
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