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Deconstructing the logline, I get:
Inciting incident = mother dies suddenly & tragically
protagonist = distraught daughter suffering grief
antagonist = cult of violent sacrificial ritual.
A mother dying suddenly has a wonderful fairytale quality to it (although genre is Thriller). In my view, Grief is not a character trait - it's an emotion, felt by said character. An example of a character trait might be Withdrawn - which is then the outcome of grief and sadness.
Think how the logline might personify the villain? Currently the cult feels very anonymous, vague, difficult to imagine.