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Penpusher · 185 points

115 points to Logliner

4 loglines
12 reviews

A gripping tale of family secrets, betrayal, and unbreakable bonds, Detective Carin Trimble is on a quest to untangle a web hints left by her late mother.

April 11, 2024
In a time when white children born to Japanese mothers were put to death, one boy survives. Across time, the boy becomes the protector of the weak.

August 11, 2021
A civilian operative writes an AI app that guarantees facial recognition. The app also turns the phone in your pocket into a targeting sensor. Is he willing to kill to protect us all from social media?

November 25, 2020
A former Special Ops Commando thought covert missions in the desert were rough. Then he married a spy who wants him dead.

September 3, 2020

on In a time when white children born to Japanese mothers were put to death, one boy survives. Across time, the boy becomes the protector of the weak.

Thanks! In a time when mixed-race children were put to death at birth, one boy survives. Across time, the boy grows into a warrior and defender of the weak
on In a time when white children born to Japanese mothers were put to death, one boy survives. Across time, the boy becomes the protector of the weak.

REVISED: In a time when mixed-race children were put to death at birth, one boy survives. Across time, the boy becomes the guardian of the weak.
on After receiving an email to partake in a heist experience, an intrepid engineering student and his friends must work out how to rob a casino; but when they discover the heist is real, they must find the creators and expose them before they’re caught.

Maybe: "When he discovers the ‘heist experiment' he signed up for is actually a real casino robbery,"
on A college student’s life changed when he gets taken in the wing of a former street racer who comes out of retirement to stop a drug lord.

How does his/her life change? Why is the change important?
on A wounded African American man seeking refuge from BLM riots appears at the door of a rich family. After taking him in, he appears on the news as wanted for murder and the family must decide if he was framed, or face the consequences of harboring a murderer.

It is too long. Remove the unnecessary words.
on When a peace-seeking alien crashes in remotest New Zealand, a feisty female scientist and a taciturn hunter must rescue him from a war-like Vietnam vet.

"remotest" - "taciturn" - Also, same as the comments above, who is who in the zoo?
on After their parents and stepparents passed away, seven siblings must separate differences and work as a family together

Not sure "separate" is the correct word.
on A civilian operative writes an AI app that guarantees facial recognition. The app also turns the phone in your pocket into a targeting sensor. Is he willing to kill to protect us all from social media?

Ah! - I see your point. I missed a salient piece of data. Rewritten. Thanks!
on A civilian operative writes an AI app that guarantees facial recognition. The app also turns the phone in your pocket into a targeting sensor. Is he willing to kill to protect us all from social media?

Thanks! Unless the phone is next to you head, exploding is not likely to be lethal. What if the AI app on your phone could triangulate your position down to half a meter?
on A civilian operative writes an AI app that guarantees facial recognition. The app also turns the phone in your pocket into a targeting sensor. Is he willing to kill to protect us all from social media?

Thank you. I tweaked the logline for clarity.