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This is way too vague. It tells us the bare minimum of the story but we need to know more as really it is just a man falls for a woman. Why is he a dreaded gangster? Why does he have to kill her? If he is a big gangster wouldn’t he be giving the order to kill, s how would he become involved in a ‘small’ time job? If he falls for her what will he do to prove that she doesn’t deserve to die?
The simple premise is there but it doesn’t tell us enough to make it interesting. If it was a hitman been hired to kill her his obstacles would be his boss. Needs to have more depth to this line.
You need a but.
Then after the but, you should tell us the consequences of him falling for her and who is opposing the couple.
I’d leave out dreaded and replace it with ‘assassin’ to begin with. Second, a detail about what makes this girl special – what is it about her that would both compel someone to fall in love with her, or why is she a target to begin with? Or what sort of gang is he in? We’d need for instance to know whether this is a drug Lord targetting say another drug lord’s daughter, or a key eyewitness, or something that makes her and the would-be assassin stand out.