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Everything you guys said is right. I'm going to shorten it up and what Richiev said is exactly what it is. Thank you guys once again.
As people have been saying the wife carrying contest is a good hook for the story as it is unusual but work on the log line as it is far too long. Take out all the names and their descriptions and focus on the one main couple to tell the log line. You have put the psychologist tells Barbara it will strengthen their marriage so write the log line for Barbara's reasons. The other couples can be added in simply with 'other couples' as s far it takes half the log line just to establish the characters and it makes it far too long.
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Wife's weight in beer, nice!
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