Penpusher
Posted: 2021-01-29T04:31:49+10:00 In:

A troubled male escort arrives at the plush apartment of a large media company CEO for the afternoon, but when her past secrets are revealed neither of them will be the same afterward

A troubled male escort arrives at the plush apartment of a large media company CEO for the afternoon, but when her past secrets are revealed neither of them will be the same afterward
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    1. Samurai

      This is what I am to see – due to the inciting incident being a secret.
      “A troubled male escort meets his match when a female executive unearths buried secrets”

      Hope this helps, take care.

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    2. Singularity

      If the troubled secret is the inciting incident then you should tell us what that troubled secret is…

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    3. Penpusher

      A logline isn’t meant to be a ‘teaser’ of the movie. It should be a succinct but complete overview of the movie. Therefore I think we need more and less detail in there.

      Less detail about the room and the events.

      In what way is escort ‘troubled’
      we don’t need to know about the plush apartment, or that it’s afternoon.
      We also probably don’t need to know the genders of the protagonists. You can possibly allude to them using pronouns.

      “When an xxxx escort is hired by a powerful media exec, XXXX occurs unearthing secrets she would have preferred remain hidden. Now to (survive/win/reclaim their lives) they must XXXXX and overcome XXXX which threatens to XXXXXX”

      Now we know who the protagonists are, what their problem is, what the stakes are, and how they must evolve in order to triumph.

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