Penpusher
Posted: 2016-01-13T12:36:38+10:00 In:

A young writer is unknowingly helped to her breaking point to produce a master piece.

A young writer is unknowingly helped to her breaking point to produce a master piece.
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    1. Uberwriter

      Creating a masterpiece and reaching breaking point are not necessarily linked. If they are linked in your story you have to find a way of getting that a cross. It is not obvious in what you have.

      Plus what is the goal of the main character.

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    2. Singularity

      As CraigDGriffiths said.

      The logline presents the main character as a passive agent being acted upon — “is unknowingly helped”– rather than the active agent of her own story, proactively pursuing her own objective goal — whatever that is. (“Produce a master piece “is vague.? A master piece what?? A novel?? A short story?? A play?)

      And what are the stakes?? Why should an audience care whether she writes a “masterpiece” or not?? Or write at all for that matter?

      Finally, the logline only evokes scenes of a writer writing, writing, writing.? Scenes of a writer writing get b-o-r-i-n-g fast.?? The movie “Becoming Jane” has short scenes of? Jane Austen?writing?, but the plot is in the?long scenes?where she is continually being?distracted, criticized, ?discouraged by almost everyone else around her.? She must overcome these negative forces in her life to write her? masterpieces. (And Jane Austen wasn’t trying? to consciously? write masterpieces.? She was trying to tell? good stories.? “Masterpiece” is history’s judgment of her objective goal .)

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    3. Mentor

      Hello,

      I recommend you to watch ?Satansbraten ?de Fassbinder. In this movie, as far as I remember, the point that to achieve a masterpiece the author must reach his breaking point is clearly stated and dramatically explored.

      You should work a little more on the concept to give a better characterization of the characters and to make clear what will be the main conflict which fuels the movie. The main character seems too passive (what does he do? what is his goal?). In other words, your logline seems too vague to me, but the concept is interesting.

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