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Everyone has made the points I could -- make it flow better, get it down to an appropriate length etc. etc.
I want to give you a positive: The title works for me because it conjures the image of the kids cartoon but your logline isn't at all. Great irony, nice work.
Everyone has made the points I could -- make it flow better, get it down to an appropriate length etc. etc.
I want to give you a positive: The title works for me because it conjures the image of the kids cartoon but your logline isn't at all. Great irony, nice work.
The logline is a bit long and some what unclear.
However from your responses to the others I got more details and clarity.
Perhaps:
After he uncovers a police coverup over of a series of murders, a renovator must protect the evidence he's got from the local police department and deliver it safely to the federal authorities.