Dividing Of a Nations
2019. Mexico is plungded into a Civil War. American Forces help the Loyalist forces escape from the war. 2021. America has split, the North and the South are at war. The Ex-president Marcerella now is a general of the US Joint-Forces unit known as the 6th Army. The Suth are beginig to gain ground and head towards Washington. 2022. Washington once the Capital of America now a battle ground. General Marcerella is the 2nd in command of all US forces in Washington. A platoon of one of his companies lead by Captain Jamerson head towards a new tactic… Survive. During the Platons Patrol, they get into a firefight with some Marines from the Elite CSMC 12th "Phoenix" Regiment, when an unatural earthquake causes the West Atlantic Fault. The Platoon have a matter of Hours to reach the Extraction point to fly back to Fort Safe(white House) before the Earthquake kills them all. 2023. a years after the earthquake the 6th Army have been given a special mission which is to invade Mexico to stop Mexican reinforcements help the Confederate (republican) States of America.
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This, is not a logline. This is the text crawling at the opening of the movie. You know, like Star Wars.
A logline is, in essence, a short summary of the film. What you’ve got here is all backstory.
Boil it down to the core of the story:
“When [insert event] happens, [Your hero] must [take a course of action].”
Hope that helps =)
Gustaf/Storyutbildningen
Best to read up on the definition of a logline on the “write it” page here: https://loglines.org/howto/
Think of it as the (pardon the analogy) most well reduced sauce of your story, any further reduction will result in burning it.
The point of a Logline is to outline the main character (MC) their over arching action throughout the plot, the main obstacles and the main antagonist (AN). Only the absolutely crucial detail should be included so a reader can understand what you story is about (genre, character and type of main struggle) and judge whether or not they want to pick it up and read the script or synopsis.
I often use a logline to help shape the bare essentials of a story and get rid of redundant characters, action and events during writing.
Hope this helps, Nir.