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A high class bakery is facing bankruptcy and Mr.Roger must swallow his pride and asks his human-smuggling brother for finacinal aid /h

September 20, 2013
A toptier bussnies man loses everything in court to his selfish wife, and must accept the father role and provide for his daughter /hugo

September 20, 2013
When the president fails to take his daughter camping during his reelection campaign, she must outsmart his security staff and kidnap him, or risk losing him to the job for another four years. //Anya

September 20, 2013
When a warphotographer is questioned regarding the fate of a girlsoldier in her prizewinning photo, she must find out what happened to the girl, or risk losing both her professional reputation and her mind. //Anya

September 20, 2013
When a german soldier deserts he come across a jewish family and together they try to flee the country while being hunted by german soldiers.

September 20, 2013
A brother and a sister takes care of each other in an abusive home an because of this a special bond is created between them, like symbiosis, one thing that can not live without another

September 20, 2013
When a young lawyer dies and is sent to hell, he is determined to break his way into heaven, or he will suffer for eternity./Kalle

September 20, 2013
When a teenager and his best friend get drawn into a video game, his friend is taken by the game’s antagonist, and now he needs to – not only save his friend – but find a way to get them both back to reality./Kalle

September 20, 2013
When a entire citys population disappears over night, it’s up to the young soldier to find out where and why in order to find his sister again. / Amanda E

September 20, 2013
When a undesigned child is born in a specificly designed world, she must find a way to exist without being earsed by the goverment and prove that being undesigned is not something wrong. /Amanda E

September 20, 2013

on A toptier bussnies man loses everything in court to his selfish wife, and must accept the father role and provide for his daughter /hugo

A toptier bussnies man loses everything in court to his selfish wife, and must accept the father role and provide for his daughter or else he will lose custody /hugo
on On the verge of striking it rich an intergalactic diamond huntress is summoned to earth for compulsory breeding, but she is kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route and must fight for her freedom to make it home before she is sentenced to death.

In order to make her goal clearer - what exactly is 'home'? Where, if she was kidnapped simply 'en-route' to Earth, will she be safe from the kidnappers? Sounds like an exciting story otherwise, good work!
on A toptier bussnies man loses everything in court to his selfish wife, and must accept the father role and provide for his daughter /hugo

One thing that might need clarifying is, what are the stakes? What happens if he fails as a father/providing for his daughter? Will he lose her to the wife?
on When the president fails to take his daughter camping during his reelection campaign, she must outsmart his security staff and kidnap him, or risk losing him to the job for another four years. //Anya

A fantastic idea, you describe what she must do; Both journey wise and in the situation and i can clearly see the moive 5/5 in my opinion but it is quiet big. Might wanna try and shorten it with something…
on When a warphotographer is questioned regarding the fate of a girlsoldier in her prizewinning photo, she must find out what happened to the girl, or risk losing both her professional reputation and her mind. //Anya

I like that you describe what she must do or "else". You make it pretty clear what will happen and i can somewhat see the whole story which is super! Might want to add what she must do, spirtually or…
on When a young lawyer dies and is sent to hell, he is determined to break his way into heaven, or he will suffer for eternity./Kalle

A new and revised logline (possibly a few words too long): When a lawyer and his wife die in a car crash and she is sent to heaven while he is doomed to spend eternity in hell, he is determined…
on A brilliant Russian Cadet shortly after his graduation day is being targeted by the CIA, his respond was a personal travel to NYC to change all well-known war tactics with the help of his genius weapons.

You might have a good story going, I don't know, cause even with the explanation in your comment, I still find it a bit confusing. I don't wanna repeat the other comments, but I do suggest that shorten it down…
on When Ed tries to commit suicide a mysterious stranger shows up and offers him a deal he cannot refuse and when Ed break the deal he has to battle not just himself but other more dark forces as well. /Amanda

Maybe it's just me, but I find it a bit unclear exactly what Ed's goal is and what the stakes are, considering he started on the verge of suicide (how much worse could it get?). I assume the story will…
on When a teenager and his best friend get drawn into a video game, his friend is taken by the game’s antagonist, and now he needs to – not only save his friend – but find a way to get them both back to reality./Kalle

Not at all what I was thinking actually, but now when you've said it, I see that the logline suggests a similar movie. /Kalle
on When a young lawyer dies and is sent to hell, he is determined to break his way into heaven, or he will suffer for eternity./Kalle

Thanks for the suggestions! The reason I picked lawyer was that I felt I could come up with a work related reason for him to go to hell, and that I need him to be fairly clever, and therefore picked…