This is another attempt at this Logline. I am currently working with a Director in Boston for production later this year (all going well).
Everyone in the script is hateful. Only one is a little likeable and that?s because he has a sad back story. The audience is trying figure out what happens next. They are unsure if they should like characters and the horrible outcome makes you feel better.
Are we rooting for the cops or the guy they beat up? I’m guessing it’s the guy they beat up so I’d maybe lead with him and highlight what his goal is e.g. “when he’s beaten for information by two crooked cops, a street-smart, petty crook must use all his wits and their paranoia to turn them against each other and release him so he can…” Probably a bit wordy and I’m making some stuff up but I think it sounds pretty cool!
Difficult to come up with a brief logline, here is an attempt but it is a little long:
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“When their former partner is killed, two cops take the lead?suspect to an abandoned warehouse to extract a confession, but when their captive uses their paranoia against them, the two officers begin to suspect the other to be the killer.”
When their former partner is murdered, two shady cops take their lead suspect to beat a confession out of him but when their captive starts playing them against each other, their trust in each other crumbles as their paranoia grows.
I’m pretty new to loglines so apologies if this doesn’t help. I’m just getting some practice in.