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Hello, be always very specific, who is the girl, what path, what change... a logline doesn't tease, it's an exact extreme synthetisis of the movie. Don't forget to give a clear goal to the protagonist, and make clear why the girl is an opponent.
You describe the inciting incident (meets the girl) too late in the logline for it to have an impact on the read. If this is a boy meets girl love story and the event that propels him into action is meeting the girl then let it do so in the same way for the reader.
After meeting the girl of his dreams in his freshmen year a [good description for the MC] must do something...
Also you have to be specific about the whole plot not just act one or the first half of the film.
What is his goal? If it is to get the girl, what is standing in his way? How will he over come the obstacle?
It's the answer to these questions that can make your story interesting.
So better to redraft the logline with the inciting incident up front then describe the MC then explain how he will achieve his goal.
Hope this helps.
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