Caught Between A Rock and No Place
clarebearPenpusher
A timid, admin clerk reluctantly chooses to be the only stable friend of an erratic, homeless woman she had idolised back when they were School Captain.
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This is a scenario, what is a character goal? That would be a story. Being a friend is a noble thing but is demonstrated by action. These actions would be the story which is the goal.
Hope this helps.
This idea seems promising but is a little thin on content.
A few good questions to ask yourself:
–What does the main character want? (This can illuminate why she’s reluctant.)
–What’s in her way? (this is a great method for hooking readers.)
–How can I give the the logline as much momentum as possible?
From the logling, it’s not really clear where the story is going. Consider: “When a timid admin clerk suddenly becomes the only stable friend of an erratic homeless person, she unravels the haunting story of how her high-school idol fell from grace.”
Untying the knot and fitting this into the suggested logline?template, you’d come up with something like :
When an erratic, homeless woman?turns out to be the old School Captain she idolised,?a timid, admin clerk must become the tower of strength the woman needs.