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NudeSatanPenpusher
Posted: November 30, 20182018-11-30T11:35:52+10:00 2018-11-30T11:35:52+10:00In: Crime

This is my logline for a short from spanish to english

Appealed by a job offer that he found on Craigslist, a young man falls into a trap where he has to transport the dead body of a child.

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      Richiev Singularity
      2018-11-30T16:18:26+10:00Added an answer on November 30, 2018 at 4:18 pm

      “When he is forced to transport the dead body of a child, an out of work man must…” (Then tell us what he must do)

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      Neer Shelter Singularity
      2018-12-01T11:26:09+10:00Added an answer on December 1, 2018 at 11:26 am

      Transport as in drive the body from the hospital or morgue to a funeral home? Or, transport as in an illegal activity of some sort?? If the former then I’m not sure what the story is – transport the body job done. If the latter, why would he agree to do the job? And why would the audience care about a character who agreed to work for such horrible people?

      Other than that, I would say the concept needs an event to compel the main character to need to take the job – other wise, it’s not clear why he MUST do what he does.

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