After stumbling into an enchanted theme park, an insecure girl must find a way to lead rival factions of imaginary characters in a revolt against the park?s delusional architect who thinks she is his long-lost love.

Slightly concerned about a delusional architect believing a young girl is his long-lost love… creepy! Any chance he believes she is his long-lost daughter and he built the park for her? Less creepy and adds a little sympathy for the antagonist which is always good! Can we give the girl an age too… this would help me imagine her character better.

I feel like the inciting incident and the goal don’t quite tie up currently. To me, stumbling into an enchanted theme park sets up a goal of getting back to the real world (Alice in Wonderland). If the goal is to lead a rebellion and defeat the architect then the inciting incident must relate to that. Maybe she has to defeat the architect in order to escape.

I think you can probably cut out ” must find a way to lead rival factions of imaginary characters in a revolt” and just have “must lead the park’s inhabitants in a revolt”. Trims a few words although I do understand why you’ve done this.

Interesting idea though. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.