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Raymond ex-soldier discovers a huge conspiracy targeting the world’s biggest technological exposition on earth while trying to prove his innocence in a set-up targeting his employer. He has to fight against a big multinational with controversial ideas topped by an ex Marshal of the region’s army to save his life and that of his loved ones.
Hi! Seems like you have a good start to a logline! However, it seems to have a lot going on here. What do you think about simplifying it to "one character" with a clear "major event" that establishes a clear "actionable goal" for the character? Example: "An ex-soldier is caught in a cat and mouse gaRead more
Hi! Seems like you have a good start to a logline! However, it seems to have a lot going on here. What do you think about simplifying it to “one character” with a clear “major event” that establishes a clear “actionable goal” for the character?
Example: “An ex-soldier is caught in a cat and mouse game between the mob and the police when he is framed for a crime he didn’t commit. He must prove his innocence before the mob kills his family.”
See lessWhen the world and its routines starts to break apart, a trapped tv-star must find out if his world is real.
Find out what? IF it's a tv-"star" how who they be unknown? The world and its routines - what are you talking about specifically. It feels like you copy/pasted your logline and only half of it was posted.
Find out what?
IF it’s a tv-“star” how who they be unknown?
The world and its routines – what are you talking about specifically.
It feels like you copy/pasted your logline and only half of it was posted.
See lessA group of thieves goes on smuggle drugs on a plane on an island only to find out it goes wrong because Predators want to destroy it.
"A group of thieves" = protagonist/s "smuggle drugs on a plane onto an island" = main character goal "Predators want to destroy it" = antagonist While Avengers movies are one example of group protagonists, most story are written from a single character viewpoint. Decscribe the group leader. What hasRead more
“A group of thieves” = protagonist/s
“smuggle drugs on a plane onto an island” = main character goal
“Predators want to destroy it” = antagonist
While Avengers movies are one example of group protagonists, most story are written from a single character viewpoint. Decscribe the group leader. What has motived this individual to become a thief ? Perhaps we can sympathies more, if they have been forced into this dangerous situation of smuggling drugs to an island.
If by ‘Predator’, you mean that cool 80’s film with Arnold Schwarzenegger, then oppositional character motivation is trophie hunting. But other predators exisit, usually motivated to plain old eat you a.k.a. Jaws. Usually the funtion of opposition is to expose character flaw. A couragous character (like Arnie in Predator 1987), when faced with a more powerful alien, casts fleeting moments of fear across his face. Nothing better than to watch a confident, tough guy shit himself momentarily, but then of course do something about it!
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