1. Posted: March 18, 2017In:

    A cash strapped hit-woman, must confront the demons of her past, while juggling the bone crunching world of professional hits and the guardianship of her deceased sisters kids.

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    Hey,I have posted the updated Logline here -?goo.gl/6wZuwg Thanks

    Hey,I have posted the updated Logline here -?goo.gl/6wZuwg

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  2. Posted: March 11, 2017In:

    A snide vigilante with a super-elastic body is pestered by a reporter who insists that she fight against an emerging evil that is determined to conquer the world.

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    Better. ?I like that it specifies exactly the McGuffin at stake.But why would some one with an "ultra-malleable" body be an "executioner" in the 1st place? ? What happened to the ?gymnast? ?That makes more sense; that is, there is logical match between the character's initial role and her defining cRead more

    Better. ?I like that it specifies exactly the McGuffin at stake.

    But why would some one with an “ultra-malleable” body be an “executioner” in the 1st place? ? What happened to the ?gymnast? ?That makes more sense; that is, there is logical match between the character’s initial role and her defining characteristic.

    And what is the trigger event? ?How does she get involved in that assignment to begin with? ?There are so many ways, so many plots, so many conspiracies whereby a super heroine in the making can earn her reputation. ?What hooks her into this assignment? ?What’s the cause-and-effect link?

    And “becomes a superheroine” ?is superfluous. ?Deliver on how she becomes one in the script proper.

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  3. Posted: March 26, 2017In:

    An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

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    Funny I originally used 'must make' because it added urgency but then changed it. So I guess I finally nailed that logline: A?Bioweapons Collector must make the hazardous journey through?sacred caverns of the ?Land of the Souls?to prevent ?a pandemic ?from the ?virus he created. and just in case thaRead more

    Funny I originally used ‘must make’ because it added urgency but then changed it. So I guess I finally nailed that logline:

    A?Bioweapons Collector must make the hazardous journey through?sacred caverns of the ?Land of the Souls?to prevent ?a pandemic ?from the ?virus he created.

    and just in case that didn’t work I also decided this is fine:

    When a bioweapons collector resurrects a deadly virus, he must seek the aid of a shaman to find a cure before it creates a pandemic.

    I have also been researching high concept ideas and sure that isn’t for the writer to decide but I do wonder if the high concept question can be raised in the query. Here is what I believe is my high concept question:

    What if scientists were able to resurrect an ancient virus and it escaped the lab during testing.

    That is the very premise of my story that is loosely based on an actual account. Are you allowed to posit questions like this in query letters?

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