1. Posted: September 7, 2021In:

    When thrust into one of his stories, a timid author must overcome writer’s block and rewrite the narrative in order to save his fictional world and its inhabitants.

    nines Penpusher

    I like this one, it is clear and I can get a feeling of what the writer is like and what the action and event is. I also get curious, how and why is the author thrust into one of his stories? Does his writing change under this pressure? Who will help him and who will be against him?

    I like this one, it is clear and I can get a feeling of what the writer is like and what the action and event is.
    I also get curious, how and why is the author thrust into one of his stories? Does his writing change under this pressure? Who will help him and who will be against him?

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  2. Posted: September 6, 2021In:

    When the love of his life is kidnapped by pirates because she carries a certain piece of gold, a smith teams up with a renowned pirate to rescue her.

    [Deleted User]

    Good start. I feel like "because she carries a certain piece of gold" is not that necessary. Also I would put in some character trait for the smith. For example: "an honorable young smith".

    Good start. I feel like “because she carries a certain piece of gold” is not that necessary. Also I would put in some character trait for the smith. For example: “an honorable young smith”.

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  3. Posted: August 25, 2021In:

    A NewEngland nurse finds herself in the center of a medical genetic ethics clash while caring for her patients – a story of modern medicine and another of ancient Mayan healing, unfold side by side, weaving togehter in this medical science fiction thriller.

    Richiev Singularity

    I think two things would help improve this logline First: Adding a goal for the lead character into the logline; what does the lead character want to accomplish? Second: You should add stakes to the logline. You describe this as an adventure thriller, which implies there are steaks, but a 'debate' dRead more

    I think two things would help improve this logline

    First: Adding a goal for the lead character into the logline; what does the lead character want to accomplish?

    Second: You should add stakes to the logline. You describe this as an adventure thriller, which implies there are steaks, but a ‘debate’ doesn’t imply stakes. What happens if the lead character loses the debate? (Whether an actual debate or metaphorical debate)

    Anyway, when the lead character ‘finds’ herself in the debate, this should cause her to have a goal, and there should be consequences if she fails to accomplish her goal.

    Hope that helps

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