1. Posted: December 7, 2023In:

    Una adolescente prodigio se embarca en una aventura por los basurales de la ciudad para encontrar a su tío que ha sido secuestrado por la Mafia a cargo del manejo de los desechos.

    Odie Samurai

    Blame it on Google translator if I mucked this logline up ;) A teenage detective sets out to the Mafia-run garbage dumps in order to rescue her kidnapped beloved uncle. I hope this helps. Keep going!

    Blame it on Google translator if I mucked this logline up 😉

    A teenage detective sets out to the Mafia-run garbage dumps in order to rescue her kidnapped beloved uncle.

    I hope this helps. Keep going!

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  2. Posted: May 21, 2023In:

    When he is denied admission to any of the college for his low grades, he gets an invitation from a mysterious college which was shut down decades ago.

    Odie Samurai

    Interesting setup. What’s the goal? You could start with “When an invitation arrives from a long-defunct college, a [subpar/jilted student] [adventure goal].” Make this yours. Take care.

    Interesting setup. What’s the goal?
    You could start with “When an invitation arrives from a long-defunct college, a [subpar/jilted student] [adventure goal].”

    Make this yours. Take care.

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  3. Posted: September 9, 2022In:

    A good-for-nothing private investigator participates in a 7 day complex scavenger hunt to prove his worth

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Arijitaro, What will happen if he does not prove his worth? or why does he have to prove his worth? I can see a conflict/challenge missing somewhere. Am I right? If so, include it and re-write. I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Arijitaro,

    What will happen if he does not prove his worth? or why does he have to prove his worth?

    I can see a conflict/challenge missing somewhere. Am I right? If so, include it and re-write.

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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