1. Posted: August 29, 2022In:

    When an orphaned French aristocrat must confront his estranged father, who means to kill him, he is shanghaied by Confederate pirates and cast into the backwoods of the Civil War, where he joins a band of notorious bushwhackers to survive.

    MitchW Logliner

    I think the character and inciting incident are there but joining the bushwhackers to survive isn't the greatest. The reason I think this is that it's a very open ended goal. He could continue 'surviving' indefinitely. You need to have an outwardly achievable goal for you main character to achieve.Read more

    I think the character and inciting incident are there but joining the bushwhackers to survive isn’t the greatest. The reason I think this is that it’s a very open ended goal. He could continue ‘surviving’ indefinitely. You need to have an outwardly achievable goal for you main character to achieve. It seems like the confrontation with his father is the true goal so I would add that into the logline rather than just surviving.

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  2. Posted: July 26, 2022In:

    Soon after WW2, a conman joins a group of treasure-hunters in their search for Hilter’s personal cache, as a deadly Mafia closes in.

    BenGilani Logliner

    A conman joins a group of adventurers who want to find Hitler's lost treasure while a deadly mob tries to catch up. I hope this helps

    A conman joins a group of adventurers who want to find Hitler’s lost treasure while a deadly mob tries to catch up.

    I hope this helps

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  3. Posted: August 25, 2022In:

    A reluctant rail enthusiast embarks across the country by trains to save a girl with supernatural abilities from an organization that will commit inhumane experiments on her.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi RailGamm97, This is how I see it: To hide a girl with supernatural abilities from a shady organization and save her from their lethal experimentations, a man reluctantly takes her on a train journey across the country. If so, use the above logline as a template and re-write. Good Luck I hope thisRead more

    Hi RailGamm97,

    This is how I see it:

    To hide a girl with supernatural abilities from a shady organization and save her from their lethal experimentations, a man reluctantly takes her on a train journey across the country.

    If so, use the above logline as a template and re-write.

    Good Luck
    I hope this helps.

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