1. Posted: October 23, 2017In:

    After a decade of hunting terrorists. Liam?s new icy adventure to restore an abandoned ski lodge ends up with his former Special forces team having to adapt to being the hunted when they cross paths with a legendary creature known for its winter scream.

    bivric Logliner

    Thanks for all the great responses... I've come up with a revised logline:While restoring an abandoned ski-lodge, a group of adrenaline-junkie ex-soldiers take sides in a secret war between a legendary creature and mysterious trappers determined to hunt it into extinction.

    Thanks for all the great responses… I’ve come up with a revised logline:While restoring an abandoned ski-lodge, a group of adrenaline-junkie ex-soldiers take sides in a secret war between a legendary creature and mysterious trappers determined to hunt it into extinction.

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  2. Posted: October 7, 2017In:

    An inspiring chronicle of a novice biker girl’s 3,000- mile long solo heroic Motorbike quest to win her inspirational nomad soul mate.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    An amateur motor-biker sets out on a dangerous 3000 mile quest in order to impress a guy/girl.

    An amateur motor-biker sets out on a dangerous 3000 mile quest in order to impress a guy/girl.

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  3. Posted: September 26, 2017In:

    A lost orphan, hunted by brutal and corrupt miners, sets out on a thrilling adventure across the Australian desert in search of her new home.

    Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai

    There's too many non-sequiturs. I don't understand why the miners would be hunting the orphan. What has she done? Why do the miners pursue her across the desert? Why does she have to go across the desert? (OK, to get to the new home ... but it's not clear why that home is across the desert). How didRead more

    There’s too many non-sequiturs.

    I don’t understand why the miners would be hunting the orphan. What has she done? Why do the miners pursue her across the desert? Why does she have to go across the desert? (OK, to get to the new home … but it’s not clear why that home is across the desert). How did this orphan, who is lost, manage to tee up a new home, across the desert?

    I think some of this needs to be made clearer on the next logline.

    Also, like Nir said — what happened that set THESE pieces in play?

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