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?In the desolate future, when an isolated and curious teenager is suddenly forced from his collapsing underground bunker into the overgrown wilderness outside, he will have to survive long enough to make a few allies if he is to find his little sister, rumored to be alive.?
Best to describe the events in order i.e inciting incident (sister is taken) then the action (fight for, search for or bargain with to get her back) goal (get the sister back). For example: After his sister is taken by a lawless gang in a post apocalypse desolate future, a [good description] teen muRead more
Best to describe the events in order i.e inciting incident (sister is taken) then the action (fight for, search for or bargain with to get her back) goal (get the sister back).
For example:
See lessAfter his sister is taken by a lawless gang in a post apocalypse desolate future, a [good description] teen must [compelling action] to get his sister back.
?In the desolate future, when a carefree and adventurous teenager is suddenly forced from his underground bunker into the world outside, he will have to mature quickly if he is to survive both the wilderness and the rogues that inhabit it.?
As the others have said.This story sets up a plot where the young man doesn't come out from the underground on his own initiative in quest of a specific objective goal..? He's pushed out? and he's gotta grow up fast if he's going to survive hostile forces.??But "to mature quickly " is?his subjectiveRead more
As the others have said.
This story sets up a plot where the young man doesn’t come out from the underground on his own initiative in quest of a specific objective goal..? He’s pushed out? and he’s gotta grow up fast if he’s going to survive hostile forces.??But “to mature quickly ” is?his subjective need — it doesn’t constitute a objective goal.
And ” if he is to survive ” is only a maintenance goal; he’s reacting to a hostile environment .? Well, the main character can start out with only a maintenance goal, but?the plot proper kicks in?when something? happens –an inciting incident — that galvanizes him to? struggle for??something more than mere survival.? At that point he becomes a protagonist proactively pursuing a?specific objective goal.
See lessWhen an intergalactic refugee crash-lands at his farm, a timid teenager must find the courage to protect the exile and himself from malicious space hunters.
Okay.? I suggest being more specific as to his refugee status.??Like, he's fleeing political and ethnic persecution in his own world.The parallels to current earthly refugee crises?are obvious and, imho, ?could be leveraged to allegorical effect enhancing the thematic value of the concept.??? That wRead more
Okay.? I suggest being more specific as to his refugee status.??Like, he’s fleeing political and ethnic persecution in his own world.
The parallels to current earthly refugee crises?are obvious and, imho, ?could be leveraged to allegorical effect enhancing the thematic value of the concept.???
That would make for ?a short film I would like to see.? Best wishes.
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