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After a car crash leaves him unable to walk and dying of thirst, an inventor and his physically-disabled cousin must traverse the harsh Australian desert using only her electric wheelchair.
Don't worry about length at this point. 30 words is ideal but not a must, if the story needs a few more words to come across in the logline, then let it be so unless of course a company or contest specify a 25 word limit. Other wise I'd endeavor to say you're still writing the script, if so this isRead more
Don’t worry about length at this point.
30 words is ideal but not a must, if the story needs a few more words to come across in the logline, then let it be so unless of course a company or contest specify a 25 word limit.
Other wise I’d endeavor to say you’re still writing the script, if so this is a structuring tool for you in which case there is no word count limit.
See lessDuring the early 1970s London, an English Police officer is framed for corruption charges and goes on the run to Africa where the Russian KGB recruit him; after years of seductive traitorous espionage, he falls in love with a Bulgarian Woman and in order to marry her, he must escape the iron grips of the KGB and face his corrupt past.
A London Police officer framed for corruption during the late seventies becomes a KGB spy, but when he falls in love in Bulgaria, he must escape the agency and return to London to face his accuser.
A London Police officer framed for corruption during the late seventies becomes a KGB spy, but when he falls in love in Bulgaria, he must escape the agency and return to London to face his accuser.
See lessIn a world where magic is controlled by a corrupt few, an outcast with elemental powers must join a rag tag group of well meaning historians to face a powerful magi and release control of magic back to the populace.
The latest draft of the logline is a huge improvement.I suggest the following: After an evil sorcerer puts her father into a comma, an anti magic activist must usurp the magic hording leader of the ruling Mage council.The mention of an aging historian has little impact on the story, as the historianRead more
The latest draft of the logline is a huge improvement.
I suggest the following:
After an evil sorcerer puts her father into a comma, an anti magic activist must usurp the magic hording leader of the ruling Mage council.
The mention of an aging historian has little impact on the story, as the historian is an ally they don’t need to be in the logline.
The lack of antagonist and the arbitrary nature of the inciting incident weakened the concept, therefore I added in an evil sorcerer as the cause. Also if she tries to over-through an entire class of people she would need to amass an army much like in the Hunger Games, unless that is described in the logline best to specify a single antagonist for her to fight against.
The lack of inner journey made the story rather superficial, therefore I add a description of the MC as an anti magic person as it puts her in direct conflict with her external journey of searching for magic powers. This adds depth to her character and adds interest. Further to that, describing the MC as a “…rebellious freedom fighter…” is confusing, with out more detail it is unclear who or what she is rebelling against or what freedom and for whom she is fighting for.
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