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  1. Posted: September 24, 2015In: Adventure

    The ruler of militant state decides to make war against the peaceful Flavestina and conquer it. Relying on his army, he doesn’t at once accept his Astrologer’s advice: to use magic for sure victory. The magic ritual, however, will require stealing the Golden Cup from the altar of the Temple of the Sun in Flavestina. Army and magic against love and courage: who will win?

    steveylang Samurai
    Added an answer on September 25, 2015 at 1:51 am

    What kind of ruler is he? Inexperienced, young, headstrong, etc... What does he actually do in the story? Your first 3 sentences describe the setup of the movie (2 sentences too long), and you never actually describe what happens, what the ruler's main 'quest' is. Where does "love" enter the pictureRead more

    What kind of ruler is he? Inexperienced, young, headstrong, etc…

    What does he actually do in the story? Your first 3 sentences describe the setup of the movie (2 sentences too long), and you never actually describe what happens, what the ruler’s main ‘quest’ is. Where does “love” enter the picture?

    You could narrow that setup down to half a sentence- “Convinced by his top advisors to invade a neighboring peaceful country, an inexperienced ruler…[WHAT HE DOES].” Something like that-

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